Imagine for a moment that you are a business owner who is hiring a new secretary. You want to make sure you’ve got a good secretary before you hire him (or her).
What kind of information would you like to know? Which ad would get your attention and earn your click? Make your decision, then scroll down to discover the answer.
In this case, ad number two is the winner. It was written by “jeffbaum71,” and it increased CTR by 162%. Where the original ad was getting 1 click, the new ad is getting 2.62 clicks.
I find this week’s contest interesting because it highlights a key principle of good ad writing. Here are a few reasons why the new ad won…
1. The title of the winning ad is more descriptive. A “Secretary Skills Test” is much more precise and descriptive than a “Secretary Test,” which is vague and open-ended.
2. “Our” is a wasted word. In most cases, you should focus on “you,” the person you are writing to. The winning ad does this: “Verify Your Applicants Have The Skills You Need.” Likewise, it is often best to avoid words that refer to yourself. These include the words I, me, we, and our. These are wasted words that often work against you in your effort to earn clicks and sales. (There are a few notable exceptions, including the Rich Jerk ads, which began: “I’m Rich, You’re Not.”)
3. The winning ad promises what employers really want. Employers don’t really care what job applicants know. They only care whether the applicant has the skills needed for the job. Hence, the winning ad focuses on verifying skills required for the job instead of knowledge.
4. The word “verify” is the perfect word to lead with. “Verify” comes from “veritas,” which means “truth.” That’s what employers want… they want the truth about job applicants’ qualifications. It’s easy to lie on a resume, and many people do. So a “secretary skills test” that verifies an applicant’s skills is going to resonate with employers.
5. The winning ad uses a stronger call to action. The phrase “Learn More Here…” naturally leads prospects to click the URL and visit the site.
The bottom line: The new ad wins because it speaks more directly to what employers are looking for and uses language that resonates with them. The new ad also saves space by avoiding possessive adjectives like “my” and “our” — and includes a strong call to action.
What’s your takeaway from this contest? Feel free to leave a comment below.
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Note: This article was produced by BoostCTR and originally appeared on Wordstream as a guest post.
About the Author: Ryan Healy is a direct response copywriter and BoostCTR writer. Since 2002, he has worked with scores of clients, including Alex Mandossian, Terry Dean, and Pulte Homes. He writes a popular blog about copywriting, advertising and business growth.